Worderella Reveals a Snippet

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  1. Well I don't know how this piece sits into the larger context of your WIP, but there's some lovely vivid imagery and descriptive turns of phrase. I really felt drawn into the environment. The line "It was as if the sky vomited on her behalf" made me laugh, but the image really works.

    1. Thank you Franklin! It's a pretty direct relation to the larger context of the WIP… Trentwood is Mary's father, and he's haunting her. Things have gotten more confusing as they realize he's not the typical ghost: he's able to possess her potential love interest to deck her other potential love interest! What daughter wouldn't feel seriously ill after seeing that?

      I'm glad you liked the imagery. I never know if I'm going overboard. And I can't help but be snarky with my descriptions sometimes haha.

  2. Well I don’t know how this piece sits into the larger context of your WIP, but there’s some lovely vivid imagery and descriptive turns of phrase. I really felt drawn into the environment. The line “It was as if the sky vomited on her behalf” made me laugh, but the image really works.

    1. Thank you Franklin! It’s a pretty direct relation to the larger context of the WIP… Trentwood is Mary’s father, and he’s haunting her. Things have gotten more confusing as they realize he’s not the typical ghost: he’s able to possess her potential love interest to deck her other potential love interest! What daughter wouldn’t feel seriously ill after seeing that?

      I’m glad you liked the imagery. I never know if I’m going overboard. And I can’t help but be snarky with my descriptions sometimes haha.

  3. This is great writing and I don't think you went overboard. You did use the word vomit twice really close together. I love the one about the sky, so if you were to change anything – I would definitely keep that one.

    Thanks for sharing, sounds like the book will be a romp to say the least.

    1. Thank you Wendy! That's a really good point, I'll have to take a look at finding alternatives for "vomit." I hate using the same word too often.

  4. This is great writing and I don’t think you went overboard. You did use the word vomit twice really close together. I love the one about the sky, so if you were to change anything – I would definitely keep that one.

    Thanks for sharing, sounds like the book will be a romp to say the least.

    1. Thank you Wendy! That’s a really good point, I’ll have to take a look at finding alternatives for “vomit.” I hate using the same word too often.

  5. I like this snippet. It makes me interested to find out what the whole thing is about!

    1. Thank you! I'm really enjoying writing this book. The characters keep surprising me… in a good way. ;)

  6. I like this snippet. It makes me interested to find out what the whole thing is about!

    1. Thank you! I’m really enjoying writing this book. The characters keep surprising me… in a good way. ;)

    1. Those are the exact adjectives I’m going for… fun, twist(ed), and creepy. Thank you! I must be on the right track.

    1. Those are the exact adjectives I'm going for… fun, twist(ed), and creepy. Thank you! I must be on the right track.

  7. What a creepy situation for Mary! I like the way you add in a little humor. It seems like that would be the only way to keep one's sanity in such a situation.

    1. Definitely. Humor, I find, is a necessity when faced with overwhelming circumstances.

  8. What a creepy situation for Mary! I like the way you add in a little humor. It seems like that would be the only way to keep one’s sanity in such a situation.

    1. Definitely. Humor, I find, is a necessity when faced with overwhelming circumstances.


  9. Well done, and, might I add, quite creepy. You certainly have a gift for compelling prose. Thank you for participating in the blogfest! I’m sorry it’s taken me so long to get caught up with reading all the entries.

    1. Thank you, Christine! I’m really glad you had the blogfest, it was a great experience.

  10. Well done, and, might I add, quite creepy. You certainly have a gift for compelling prose. Thank you for participating in the blogfest! I’m sorry it’s taken me so long to get caught up with reading all the entries.

    1. Thank you, Christine! I’m really glad you had the blogfest, it was a great experience.

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