The new year cometh

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  1. I’m confused… if Mary is a maid, why does she have a scullery maid? I know they are two different positions, but still. Maybe it’s just me, but Mr Spencer sounds like a rake to me. Is he a gentlemen of any standing at all? If so, why’s he going for maids? Does Mary get any income from her father’s death? The first sentence too me, implied she was low-rung society. While her father’s ghost is no good, why isn’t Mary better off without the guy?

    (Probably not what you wanted to hear? Right?)

  2. I’m confused… if Mary is a maid, why does she have a scullery maid? I know they are two different positions, but still. Maybe it’s just me, but Mr Spencer sounds like a rake to me. Is he a gentlemen of any standing at all? If so, why’s he going for maids? Does Mary get any income from her father’s death? The first sentence too me, implied she was low-rung society. While her father’s ghost is no good, why isn’t Mary better off without the guy?

    (Probably not what you wanted to hear? Right?)

  3. Actually, that’s exactly what I needed to hear! I had no idea I was still causing confusion, and I obviously need to add more information. When I wrote “maid” to describe Mary, I actually meant “single.” Poor choice of words… she’s actually the daughter of a viscount. The main premise is that Mary’s lonely after taking care of her father for eight years, and feeling a little desperate about her loneliness, so she accepts her longtime and only friend Mr Spencer (she does have money, but no real prospects since rich Americans are taking all of the London elite and Mary, for her own reasons, doesn’t want to go to London). It’s a rash decision she immediately regrets, so she breaks it off. Here is the second half of the hook I wrote above:

    …and her secret deathbed promise comes back to haunt her…literally.

    An imaginary person resembling the late Lord Trentwood makes it clear he expects Mary to fulfill her promise: to find love by the time she’s 27. And that he thinks Mr Spencer’s half-brother, the widowed Lord Hartwell, is the man for her. Just when Mary starts to agree with Trentwood, old love interests strike new sparks for both Hartwell and Mary, forcing them to decide what is more important: clinging to the past, or hoping for the future?

  4. Actually, that’s exactly what I needed to hear! I had no idea I was still causing confusion, and I obviously need to add more information. When I wrote “maid” to describe Mary, I actually meant “single.” Poor choice of words… she’s actually the daughter of a viscount. The main premise is that Mary’s lonely after taking care of her father for eight years, and feeling a little desperate about her loneliness, so she accepts her longtime and only friend Mr Spencer (she does have money, but no real prospects since rich Americans are taking all of the London elite and Mary, for her own reasons, doesn’t want to go to London). It’s a rash decision she immediately regrets, so she breaks it off. Here is the second half of the hook I wrote above:

    …and her secret deathbed promise comes back to haunt her…literally.

    An imaginary person resembling the late Lord Trentwood makes it clear he expects Mary to fulfill her promise: to find love by the time she’s 27. And that he thinks Mr Spencer’s half-brother, the widowed Lord Hartwell, is the man for her. Just when Mary starts to agree with Trentwood, old love interests strike new sparks for both Hartwell and Mary, forcing them to decide what is more important: clinging to the past, or hoping for the future?

  5. Ah. Now that I understand Mary’s place in the world, it’s much clearer. I still think Spencer sounds like a rake. ;)

  6. Ah. Now that I understand Mary’s place in the world, it’s much clearer. I still think Spencer sounds like a rake. ;)

  7. Well then that’s definitely something I need to work on, because Spencer is sort of a rake, but he also isn’t a bad guy. Just misled. :)

  8. Well then that’s definitely something I need to work on, because Spencer is sort of a rake, but he also isn’t a bad guy. Just misled. :)


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